New story: Riaend's Haven

[eileen0001]

In December 2010, I started a Sims story on the exchange, Life Unexpected. As much as I enjoyed writing it, but I felt like it was missing something.
So, as a result of major computer issues, I had to delete my games and re-format my hard drive. This actually turned out to be a blessing in disguise.
From the moment I posted Part 8 of Life Unexpected, I began re-writing my story. I decided to call it Riaend's Haven. It's got the same characters, but with a new title and new storyline. And I'm loving it.
I posted the prologue on Wordpress. Here's the link:

eileen0001.wordpress.com/about/riaends-haven/
OR
thesims2.ea.com/exchange/story_detail.php?asset_id=293053&searchPage=exch&search=1&asset_type=story&key=&order=UPDATE_DATE+desc&nrows=64&storyCat=&locality=&country=&view=new&hideFramework=&languageCode=

I will not be posting the full chapters on the Exchange. It's just too much work.
Please let me know what you think. I am already done typing up all of Season One of Riaend's Haven, and I am half-way done with Season 2. [I've got a whole team of proofreaders, but a gal can never have too many!]. Let me know if interested!

If interested in reading the previous chapters of Life Unexpected, visit my page here to read them.

thesims2.ea.com/mysimpage/pod.php

PS: I will be taking these chapters down soon. I only left them up as a result of some fan requests.

Attached is the cover picture for the Prologue. I made it a while ago and it took me an hour.

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[DEVOTEDSHEPERD]

8-)cool you are so talent i love .Thanks for sharing your completed story shall be a hit.

[eileen0001]

Thanks so much! That really means a lot to me!

[eileen0001]

I really hate summer classes - it's taking away all of the time that I could possibly have to play my game and work on my story!
On the bright side, I had to build completely new sets for my game - takes forever!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Anyways, Chapter 1 will be up real soon, I promise!

[◦BB◦]

Nice job ! Thanks for posting about it!

I feel like it would be very interesting and intrigueing, but I don't actually understand what's going on. I'm also a bit confused as to which characters are which.

The pictures are too dark and saturated/contrasted. Here's a good lighting tutorial. maybe next time you could edit them less?

This doesn't really matter, but you don't have to italicize the dialogue every time.

I hope this helps ! If you make these changes, I think it will be really good!

[eileen0001]

Thanks BB, and I'm working on that.

I used photo shop to edit them, and they turned out much worse than I wanted. Will leave them for the next story, besides I'm literally in love with the graphics card of my new laptop.

I put Riaend's Haven on hold - for now. I have been writing another story for over a year now, and I'm going to go with it for now.

I will post links when I'm ready to start!